Thank you for the opportunity to read this revised work-in-progress. Itâ€™s coming along excellently. I agree with Kurt that youâ€™ve done a good job of revising your introduction, especially where this concerns organizing how you frame the topic for intellectual coherence as well as accessibility and relevance for your particular audience. The distinction between cosmopolitanism and education banking and socialization models has been nicely revised for clarity and succinctness.
Below are some suggestions, most of which relate to accessibility (as requested).
It was a pleasure to read your revised work. Your writing style is excellent; itâ€™s clear youâ€™re focused on making your thoughts as accessible as possible without losing their scholarly richness. Below are some suggestions, which largely apply to accessibility per your request.
Great job all around, Claire!
"Where are you?"
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